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Yitz

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

Hi - I'm in the process of designing this 3-panel brochure and was looking
for feedback and critiques so I can improve on it. Please bash anything you
don't like!


Front:
http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...LeagueLarge.jpg

Inside:

http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...InsideLarge.jpg


Thanks,

Yitz


radman

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

very nice... typically american design tho!
i have a logo book showcasing 'the best logo designs' and the american stuff
is really similar (suppose the same coud be said about scandanavian, german,
french and british design)

mark

"Yitz" <thanks@fornothing.com> wrote in message
news:tpnBb.1104$tk1.292160@news20.bellglobal.com...
quote:

> Hi - I'm in the process of designing this 3-panel brochure and was looking
> for feedback and critiques so I can improve on it. Please bash anything


you
quote:

> don't like!
>
>
> Front:
> http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...LeagueLarge.jpg
>
> Inside:
>
> http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...InsideLarge.jpg
>
>
> Thanks,
>
> Yitz
>
>




Jeff Engel

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

and where are you from?








radman wrote:
[QUOTE][color=darkred]
> very nice... typically american design tho!
> i have a logo book showcasing 'the best logo designs' and the american stuff
> is really similar (suppose the same coud be said about scandanavian, german,
> french and british design)
>
> mark
>
> "Yitz" <thanks@fornothing.com> wrote in message
> news:tpnBb.1104$tk1.292160@news20.bellglobal.com...
> you

Littleboy

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

Hi there Yitz

Really very nice job!

True what Radman says, looks very traditional american, but appreciate that
in most cases.

The only thing I noticed was that in the picture with the 2 girls, 1 of them
(or perhaps both?) could use a teeth whitening treatment :)

I also thought about the Statue of Liberty. It looks quite a lot green. I
haven't looked for reference material, but it seems it could be desaturated
little.

But once again, very nice!

Greets

Littleboy

"Yitz" <thanks@fornothing.com> wrote in message
news:tpnBb.1104$tk1.292160@news20.bellglobal.com...
quote:

> Hi - I'm in the process of designing this 3-panel brochure and was looking
> for feedback and critiques so I can improve on it. Please bash anything


you
quote:

> don't like!
>
>
> Front:
> http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...LeagueLarge.jpg
>
> Inside:
>
> http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...InsideLarge.jpg
>
>
> Thanks,
>
> Yitz
>
>




Paul Furman

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

The old looking faded edge effect works well on the inside and the flag
but looks akward with the cityscape & green flap. Especially the address
over the cityscape. Just my first thoughts. I didn't know what the faded
edge was implying till I saw the other pages. Better than I could do
though <g>.

Yitz wrote:
quote:

> Hi - I'm in the process of designing this 3-panel brochure and was looking
> for feedback and critiques so I can improve on it. Please bash anything you
> don't like!
>
>
> Front:
> http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...LeagueLarge.jpg
>
> Inside:
>
> http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...InsideLarge.jpg
>
>
> Thanks,
>
> Yitz
>
>



radman

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

me = mark | r

mark
"Jeff Engel" <jengel@fcb.com> wrote in message
news:3FD6076E.DA2531E@fcb.com...
quote:

> and where are you from?
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
> radman wrote:
>
stuff[QUOTE][color=darkred]
german,[QUOTE][color=darkred]
looking[QUOTE][color=darkred]
anything[QUOTE][color=darkred]
>




mark | r

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

UK

mark
"radman" <trooperbill@hotmail.com> wrote in message
news:3fd60714$0$7007$cc9e4d1f@news.dial.pipex.com...
quote:

> very nice... typically american design tho!
> i have a logo book showcasing 'the best logo designs' and the american


stuff
quote:

> is really similar (suppose the same coud be said about scandanavian,


german,
quote:

> french and british design)
>
> mark
>
> "Yitz" <thanks@fornothing.com> wrote in message
> news:tpnBb.1104$tk1.292160@news20.bellglobal.com...
looking[QUOTE][color=darkred]
> you
>
>




Yitz

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

Thanks for all your responses... and compliments.

Looking forward to more critiques!

Yitz


Matt Bostock

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

Lookin good :)

Matt
--
Banging your head against a wall uses 150 calories an hour.


"Yitz" <thanks@fornothing.com> wrote in message
news:tpnBb.1104$tk1.292160@news20.bellglobal.com...
quote:

> Hi - I'm in the process of designing this 3-panel brochure and was looking
> for feedback and critiques so I can improve on it. Please bash anything


you
quote:

> don't like!
>
>
> Front:
> http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...LeagueLarge.jpg
>
> Inside:
>
> http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...InsideLarge.jpg
>
>
> Thanks,
>
> Yitz
>
>


Lookin good :)

Matt
--
Banging your head against a wall uses 150 calories an hour.


"Yitz" <thanks@fornothing.com> wrote in message
news:tpnBb.1104$tk1.292160@news20.bellglobal.com...
quote:

> Hi - I'm in the process of designing this 3-panel brochure and was looking
> for feedback and critiques so I can improve on it. Please bash anything


you
quote:

> don't like!
>
>
> Front:
> http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...LeagueLarge.jpg
>
> Inside:
>
> http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...InsideLarge.jpg
>
>
> Thanks,
>
> Yitz
>
>




Ph

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

Yitz wrote:
quote:

>
> Thanks for all your responses... and compliments.
>
> Looking forward to more critiques!
>
> Yitz



Looks good. I agree: very American, lots of flags and the
statue, but appropriate probably in this case? (before you
ask: I am Dutch).

One technical remark: the test on the inside does not
"register" with which I mean: the lines in the first and
second column are not on the same height. Some may find that
picky, I do not, lining it all up makes it much more
peaceful to the eyes.

I realize using the small caps makes that a bit hard, but it
is doable.
--
Peter
Littleboy

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

Hej Peter

Now that you mention it.... that's true.
It is quite disturbing.

It should be easy enough to correct though, so please do Yitz.

"Ph" <PeterH@cox.net> wrote in message news:3FD6255B.F0297E65@cox.net...
quote:

> Yitz wrote:
>
> Looks good. I agree: very American, lots of flags and the
> statue, but appropriate probably in this case? (before you
> ask: I am Dutch).
>
> One technical remark: the test on the inside does not
> "register" with which I mean: the lines in the first and
> second column are not on the same height. Some may find that
> picky, I do not, lining it all up makes it much more
> peaceful to the eyes.
>
> I realize using the small caps makes that a bit hard, but it
> is doable.
> --
> Peter




Ph

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

I can imagine why it happened, it is probably all made in
Illustrator Yitz? I woud always make the images in
Photoshop/Illustrator and add the text in InDesign or
XPress. Much stronger for text lay out of course. And like I
said the small caps make it somewhat more problematic.

Teenyweeny question.........I see that a lot in the States
(where I am living now). Is that just me? I even want it to
register on both sides of the page, hold it through the
light and the text should be on the same height.

Peter(AZ)


Littleboy wrote:[QUOTE][color=darkred]
>
> Hej Peter
>
> Now that you mention it.... that's true.
> It is quite disturbing.
>
> It should be easy enough to correct though, so please do Yitz.
>
> "Ph" <PeterH@cox.net> wrote in message news:3FD6255B.F0297E65@cox.net...
woodsie

2003-12-09, 9:31 pm

could u make it even bigger!




In article <tpnBb.1104$tk1.292160@news20.bellglobal.com>, "Yitz"
<thanks@fornothing.com> wrote:
quote:

>Hi - I'm in the process of designing this 3-panel brochure and was looking
>for feedback and critiques so I can improve on it. Please bash anything you
>don't like!
>
>
>Front:
>http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...LeagueLarge.jpg
>
>Inside:
>
>http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...InsideLarge.jpg
>
>
>Thanks,
>
>Yitz


Yitz

2003-12-10, 12:21 pm

Thanks for your political correctness concerns. Acknowledged.

"woodsie" <none@none.com> wrote in message
news:none-1012031150280001@mebax15-a158.dialup.optusnet.com.au...[QUOTE][color=darkred]
> could u make it even bigger!
>
>
>
>
> In article <tpnBb.1104$tk1.292160@news20.bellglobal.com>, "Yitz"
> <thanks@fornothing.com> wrote:
>
looking[QUOTE][color=darkred]
you[QUOTE][color=darkred]


Chrissy Chen

2003-12-10, 12:21 pm


"Yitz" <thanks@fornothing.com> wrote in message
news:UdoBb.1357$tk1.319480@news20.bellglobal.com...
quote:

> Thanks for all your responses... and compliments.
>
> Looking forward to more critiques!
>
> Yitz
>
>



Looks like shit.
Improve it by torching it, or is it illegal to burn the flag?

Death to the christian military.



mscir

2003-12-10, 12:21 pm

The flag's shape looks like it's draped over a coffin, very appropriate
since we're still involved in a war (or whatever Bush calls it now)!

The statue of liberty, alongside kids who look like a bunch of hardy
partiers?

Personally I'd ditch the flag and statue.

Mike

Yitz wrote:
quote:

> Hi - I'm in the process of designing this 3-panel brochure and was looking
> for feedback and critiques so I can improve on it. Please bash anything you
> don't like!
>
>
> Front:
> http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...LeagueLarge.jpg
>
> Inside:
>
> http://www.pushingtheenvelope.ca/NC...InsideLarge.jpg
>
>
> Thanks,
>
> Yitz
>
>



Ph

2003-12-10, 12:21 pm

Yitz wrote:
quote:

>
> Thanks for your political correctness concerns. Acknowledged.
>



Am I in your killfile?
--
Peter
Yitz

2003-12-10, 12:21 pm

Hey Peter - thanks for mentioning that - yeah the file was made in
Illustrator. I agree that the text should be on the same base line. I'll fix
that.

Yitz


"Ph" <PeterH@cox.net> wrote in message news:3FD65E92.72E5E652@cox.net...[QUOTE][color=darkred]
> I can imagine why it happened, it is probably all made in
> Illustrator Yitz? I woud always make the images in
> Photoshop/Illustrator and add the text in InDesign or
> XPress. Much stronger for text lay out of course. And like I
> said the small caps make it somewhat more problematic.
>
> Teenyweeny question.........I see that a lot in the States
> (where I am living now). Is that just me? I even want it to
> register on both sides of the page, hold it through the
> light and the text should be on the same height.
>
> Peter(AZ)
>
>
> Littleboy wrote:


Yitz

2003-12-10, 12:21 pm

What does killfile mean?


"Ph" <PeterH@cox.net> wrote in message news:3FD6B801.30315D98@cox.net...
quote:

> Yitz wrote:
>
> Am I in your killfile?
> --
> Peter




Yitz

2003-12-10, 12:21 pm

My mom said it looks like a coffin too.

I don't want it to look like a coffin. :(


"mscir" <mscir@access4less.net> wrote in message
news:vtdcfcd399t9f0@corp.supernews.com...
quote:

> The flag's shape looks like it's draped over a coffin, very appropriate
> since we're still involved in a war (or whatever Bush calls it now)!
>
> The statue of liberty, alongside kids who look like a bunch of hardy
> partiers?
>
> Personally I'd ditch the flag and statue.
>
> Mike
>
> Yitz wrote:
looking[QUOTE][color=darkred]
you[QUOTE][color=darkred]
>




supeg

2003-12-10, 12:21 pm

>I see that a lot in the States
quote:

> (where I am living now). Is that just me? I even want it to



www.pushingtheenvelope.ca, considering it's a .ca domain, I'll make the leap
and say the designer is in Canada not the US. Just a small point, may be
picky.


Yitz

2003-12-10, 9:19 pm

Thanks - I'll take a look at the teeth and statue colours.

Yitz.


"Littleboy" <littleboy_at_emp3mail.com> wrote in message
news:3fd60a6d$0$160$edfadb0f@dread11.news.tele.dk...
quote:

> Hi there Yitz
>
> Really very nice job!
>
> True what Radman says, looks very traditional american, but appreciate


that
quote:

> in most cases.
>
> The only thing I noticed was that in the picture with the 2 girls, 1 of


them
quote:

> (or perhaps both?) could use a teeth whitening treatment :)
>
> I also thought about the Statue of Liberty. It looks quite a lot green. I
> haven't looked for reference material, but it seems it could be


desaturated
quote:

> little.
>
> But once again, very nice!
>
> Greets
>
> Littleboy
>
> "Yitz" <thanks@fornothing.com> wrote in message
> news:tpnBb.1104$tk1.292160@news20.bellglobal.com...
looking[QUOTE][color=darkred]
> you
>
>




Ph

2003-12-10, 9:19 pm

Never kind I am not:)))

Killfile is a set of rules with which you can avoid seeing
people on usenet you choose not to see.

Peter(AZ)

Yitz wrote:[QUOTE][color=darkred]
>
> What does killfile mean?
>
> "Ph" <PeterH@cox.net> wrote in message news:3FD6B801.30315D98@cox.net...
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