Flash Site Design - critique this site

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critique this site

martinstaceyuk

2006-05-15, 6:44 pm

Hi, i've just designed this site:

http://www.kjslaundry.com/test

any feedback would be really appriciated!

cheers

Dean Utian

2006-05-15, 6:44 pm

Hi,

The clothes line looks good and the zoom in is nice. Don't mind hearing
bird chirping but hate hearing a buzz when the bee comes. That's enough
to drive people crazy. I switched off the sound as a courtesy to
continue looking. But, if i was visiting a site which had that sound,
I'd be outa there immediately.

Contact us - I'd change the 'kjs laundry' cloud and box under to a
different colour from the other clouds so it stands out more.
Collections - Can't read the text under the pics - toooo small.
Press - Maybe when stating the magazine name, also state the date.

regards
Dean

Director Lecturer / Consultant
http://www.fbe.unsw.edu.au/learning/director
http://www.multimediacreative.com.au

jupiterk1

2006-05-15, 6:44 pm

That's pretty neat! I like the navigation scheme - it isn't obvious, but it's
easy to figure out; and the bird animation is really cool. There were a couple
minor QA things that I found, but they're minor and shouldn't be a problem to
fix.

1. On the 'Contact Us' page, the email link didn't seem to work. My cursor
did switch over to the pointing finger cursor, but nothing happened when I
clicked on it.

2. On the 'Register' page, I would place the text input cursor in the 'name'
text box as soon as the page opens (set focus). I suppose it's no big deal if
the user has to click in there himself, but one fewer step the user has to make
to fill out a form could make a difference in the conversion rate.

3. On the 'Press' page, you could make the selector buttons cycle through the
pages (i.e., go from 4 right back to 1, or from 1 right back to 4).

4. When leaving the 'Collections' page, the idea bubble above the bird still
displays 'selections' (it doesn't unload the text).

I also noticed the things that Dean pointed out.

I think it looks cool!

brad_sa

2006-05-16, 3:40 am

Hey,

This is great I really like the design idea, keep working on it.

Yes I agree with all points mentioned above.

I would like to touch on the clothes line animation. I think it would look
more realistic if the pegs holding the clothes up did not move separately from
the line. In the reall world obviously the pegs are firmly attached to the
line, so they would move with the line.

Have you thought of adding some animation to the clothes themself. Just have
some slight movement to help the whole animation be a bit more organic looking.

When you mouse over the clothes they could color up slowly rather than just
turning straight to color.

These are merely suggestions.

Keep it going I like it.

Cheers

Brad